This site gives published English-language haiku, senryu and haibun, with news of the Central Valley Haiku Club (CVHC). For membership or other questions, contact CVHC President Yvonne Cabalona.
Monday, April 21, 2008
before the cars drown the sound of wings flapping across water
I like this haiku Amy. It has a Zen-like quality to it. Traditional exposition has influenced us so much that I'll bet many English readers will feel the poem is "incomplete," as in an incomplete sentence. Of course, we all know that haiku differ. Your poem creates an expectation. It reminded me of other one-line haiku, so I looked it up in "The Haiku Anthology" (edited by Cor van den Heuvel, W. W. Norton, 1999), like this from that book:
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I like this haiku Amy. It has a Zen-like quality to it. Traditional exposition has influenced us so much that I'll bet many English readers will feel the poem is "incomplete," as in an incomplete sentence. Of course, we all know that haiku differ. Your poem creates an expectation. It reminded me of other one-line haiku, so I looked it up in "The Haiku Anthology" (edited by Cor van den Heuvel, W. W. Norton, 1999), like this from that book:
in the eggshell after the egg has hatched
(by Michael Segers, p. xli).
Excellent haiku!
Bill
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