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through chain link
and over razor wire
blooming almond tree
before dawn
silhouette
of a mockingbird song
- Mark Hollingsworth
distant thunder
a few cherry blossoms
float to earth
just blossoming
we meet under
the cherry tree
spring darkness
the scent of cherry blossoms
is bright
- w. f. owen
3 comments:
Concerning "spring darkness": to eliminate the "is" might the second and third line read something like,
cherry blossoms'
bright scent
Hi Mark, yes, that does make it
more compact. I don't usually use
verbs. I put these in because they
were winners in the Vancouver Cherry
Blossom Haiku Contest in 2007.
I like your suggestion.
Bill
Great poems Mark.
About "over & through," two things:
1. Why the ampersand (&) and not "and"?
2. Do you need "this year's" in line three?
(Of course, you know I'm always trying to cut
words--being a minimalist).
Bill
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